Rate my lyrics (pretty please with uranium powered super cherries on top)?

You are really good...well done. Would love to hear it with music, guitar and some skin drum in the background.. but then thats me. Another guy will say yeah... crack that out with a noisy rock band dude... but I really think to appreciate good lyrics you have to hear what they are when sung and often that gets lost when its belted out. Brilliant, carry on, you obviously get a lot of pleasure from writing.